My honorable person is Toshizo Hijigata.
He was lived in Japan about 180 years ago. When he was 28 years old, he was choosen a sub captaion of ShinsenGumi that was the security of the Edo era.
He always helped his captain, Isami Kondo, with his royalty.He hoped to peaceful world. Furthermor, he defend the moribund Edo Shogunate.
I respect his royalty and courage becausehe never betrayal. However he was died at war, but his effort are still living in this world.
advcomp said,
June 30, 2007 @ 2:58 pm
授業で懇談したように、再度見直して、再度投稿ください。
advcomp said,
June 30, 2007 @ 3:04 pm
> My honorable person is Toshizo Hijigata.
honeorable –> awkward
My idol is xxx
advcomp said,
June 30, 2007 @ 3:05 pm
Here we go.
> He was lived in Japan about 180 years ago.
was lived –> not passive?
advcomp said,
June 30, 2007 @ 3:05 pm
typos and careless mistakes?
> When he was 28 years old, he was choosen a sub captaion of ShinsenGumi that was the security of the Edo era.
typo – mis-spelling here and there.
Proof read more carefully before posting a thread.
Use ‘spell-check’ tool in MS-WORD.
that was the security –> not good complement (grammar)
Gumi that was the gurdian group of the Edo era.
whose side –> the Emperor or Shogunate 幕府？
advcomp said,
June 30, 2007 @ 3:06 pm
Proof read more carefully!
> He always helped his captain, Isami Kondo, with his royalty.He hoped to peaceful world.
typo –> royalty.He
hoped to xxx world –> wrong usage
advcomp said,
June 30, 2007 @ 3:06 pm
> Furthermor, he defend the moribund Edo Shogunate.
Furthermor –> typo
he defend –> past tense
> I respect his royalty and courage becausehe never betrayal.
becausehe –> typo
betrayal –wrong 品詞 動詞が必要では？
advcomp said,
June 30, 2007 @ 3:07 pm
> However he was died at war, but his effort are still living in this world.
he was died –> wrong use of verb
effor are –> number concord
living –> what does it mean?
cherished? respected?
advcomp said,
October 19, 2007 @ 10:08 am
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I submitted your work here, as the topic is your role model:
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advcomp said,
October 19, 2007 @ 10:10 am
I regret that your composition was too short for HOLT’s site to grade.
If you got more time and expand this, you might be able to get a score by their program.
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The above site was not easily located in class today (10/19/07), but returning to my office after class, I have found IT, which woulod be an additional assignment… . Too bad, but this is life.
advcomp said,
October 19, 2007 @ 10:17 am
The HOLT’s automatic essay scoring site has been re-located:
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The above site was not easily located in class today (10/19/07), but returning to my office after class, I have found IT, which woulod be an additional assignment… . Too bad, but this is life.